Spartan-Man episodes 1&2

Community General Discussion
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This is a new machinima series I’ve started and would like feedback

episode 1 : http://youtu.be/ymx9fsnvhfU

episode 2 : http://youtu.be/D1iYkH8o7Hw

thanks

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Honest Opinion:

So I watch both episodes and I would like to sat firstly, very cool introduction. I like the comic intro as well as the background music.
I feel that each episode is wayyy too short. It lacks content. I feel like you have a cool concept with potential, you just need to develop it a bit more.

I understand this is all new and I wish you the best! Keep posting future episodes in these forums and i will continue watching and critiquing :slight_smile:

Good job so far!

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episode 3 & 4 are longer and I plan on making future episodes 5-10 mins in length

thanks for the feedback

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Nice camera angles! I also liked the clarity of the voice actors.

My main suggestion would be to tighten up your intro. I felt like it didn’t tell me enough about what I was about to watch. Take notes from cartoon intros. They often straight up tell you what the show is about. It doesn’t have to be that obvious, but I felt that the intro was too long for telling me so little.

Other than that, keep it up!

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thanks Greenskull I will work on making a new intro when the first story arc is finished