ODST Ops scripts

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If there will be an ODST Ops in halo 5… I have my own script to share, please :slight_smile:

ODST Ops - Episode 1

Location: Crash site at Earth
Lasky: Lasky to Infinity, something large just crashed in the middle of the dessert. I need some troopers down here to come with me and check this thing out.

Infinity: Yes, sir. Dropping some ODST’s to your location.

-ODST’s drop and come out their pods-

Lasky: So, you’re the troopers. Thanks for coming down here. Couldn’t go to that crash site alone, because uh… you never know if there’s enemies aboard that ship. You guys must be Buck, Dutch, and the Rookie?

ODST’s: Yes, Sir. That’s us.

Lasky: Ok, troopers! Let’s get on these mongooses and go check the crash site out.

-Lasky and troopers aboard their rides, and head to the crash site-

Dutch: Woah… -Getting closer to the crash site- What is that?

Captain Del Rio: Infinity captain to Lasky, what do you guys got there?

Lasky: Unidentifyed UNSC starship… We’re going in.

Del Rio: As soon as you guys find out what it is, contact me.

Lasky: Yes, sir.

Buck: Sir, it looks plasma damaged…

Lasky: Troopers… prepare your weapons. There’s probably covenant here. -Pulls out magnum-

Troopers: Yes, sir.

Buck: -Pulls out Battle rifle-

Dutch: -pulls out 2 SMG’s-

Rookie: -pulls out assault rifle-

Lasky: Look. There’s a damaged hole we can fit in through. Head in troopers.

-Troopers and lasky go through hole-

Dutch: Dead grunts and jackals all over the place.

Buck: Looks like they were killed by the crash.

Lasky: Then, that means they were alive just before the crash. Some can be still alive. Be quiet.

Dutch: Where’s the dead humans? Could this ship be abandoned?

Lasky: Either that, or they’re in their tubes resting.

Rookie: Do you guys hear tha-

Lasky: -Interuppts rookie- Shh! Hide somewhere! A brute squad…

-Troopers and lasky hide in corners-

Brute: No sir! No sign of humans on this ship. But we crashed. -talking to covenant leader (Jul M’dama, or another leader)-

Brute 2: Wait a minute. I smell human flesh! Check everywhere!

Lasky: Alright troopers. On the count of 3… We fire! 1…2…3! -Whispers-

-ODST’s and Lasky start shooting brute squad-

Brute 2: Humans! I knew it! Kill them! -Brute squad starts firing back-

Dutch: Eat this, you covenant -Yoinks!-! -Throws grenade-

Buck: …Are they dead?..

Lasky: Yes, they’re dead.

Del Rio: Captain to Lasky, what do you guys have there?

Lasky: Still not Identified. But there are covies here. Troopers… let’s explore more.

Buck: I thought the brutes were extinct…?

Lasky: We all thought wrong.

End of episode 1. Will post more soon, below.

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Looks great man maybe this could be a side game before h5. Why do i feel the unidentified ship is the Spirit of Fire?
Looking forward to more i love reading these scripts.

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I like it. Maybe more military jargon could be mixed in with the script, but sounds cool. And I like how you gave the Rookie a speaking part. :slight_smile:

My only issue with the script is Captain Del Rio. After he abandoned Master Chief and Cortana on Requiem to retreat to Earth, FLEETCOM, or something, can’t remember what Laskey mentioned when the Didact’s ship exited slipspace at Earth, didn’t take kindly to his abandoning of the Chief. My suspicion was that he was discharged, thus making him no longer the captain of the Infinity, also leading to the promotion of Laskey to Captain and making him captain of the Infinity.

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I forgot to say, the whole episode, you’re playing in the ship…

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ODST Ops - Episode 2

-Gunfire and brute falls down. ODST’s and Lasky walk in-

Lasky: Look. Three rooms. Look in all of them, troopers.

Buck: -enters room 1- Uh…I got a room full of cryotubes…

Dutch: -Enters room 2- I got the same thing…

Rookie: -enters room 3- Same here…

Lasky: Look who’s inside those tubes. Could be some Spartan 2’s Missing in Action…

Buck: -Reading a cryotube label- Hmm… Captain James Gregory Cutter…Sir, i found the captain of this ship!

Lasky: Activate that cryotube and look in the others! Let me speak with him.

Buck: -activates Captain Cutter’s cryotube-

Cutter: -awakes and coughs- Where am i? Who are you? Wait…I’m still on the Spirit of Fire! How did you find us?

Lasky: Captain Cutter… Hello. I am Commander Lasky from the UNSC Infinity. Your ship was surely gone for a long time! Your ship crashed onto Earth because it was damaged by covenant. But don’t worry, i’ll find a way to fix it.

Cutter: I’m glad someone found us.

Dutch: Sir, I got some Spartan II’s over here! -Halo music starts playing-

Rookie: So do I.

Lasky: Activate them troopers!

Del Rio: Del Rio to Lasky, what do you got?

Lasky: Sir! You’re gonna love this! We found missing UNSC ship Spirit of Fire! It has Spartan II’s aboard too!

Del Rio: Sending several pelicans to pick you guys up! We’re bringing Captain Cutter and those spartans aboard!

Lasky: Ok, Sir! Troopers gear up. We’re heading abck to the Infinity!

-Moments later on the Infinity-

Del Rio: Good to see you old friend! -Shakes Cutter’s hand-

Cutter: Good to see you too! Listen uhh…my ship is damaged. Commander lasky here said you guys could do something about it.

Del Rio: Of course! I’ll send some engineers down there.

Cutter: Thank you. I appreciate i-

-marine disturbs in panic-

Marine: Sir! Covenant! On Earth! Again! Rightnow! Do something!

Del Rio: Covenant just don’t know when to quit! Sending marines and special teams of ODST’s. Troopers…double time.

Lasky: Troopers. I’ve put you back with your old team back when you were at New Mombasa!

-Moments later-

Buck: Good to see you all again! Romeo, Dutch, Mickey, Rookie, Dare, ready to get back to work?

Romeo: Yes, Sir!

Mickey: I’m ready to kick some covenant -Yoink-.

Lasky: Troopers.Get to your pods,ASAP! Oh yeah… if you see some elites down there[… don’t shoot them. The Arbiter’s forces have rejoined us in combat! Good luck down there, and save Hummanity! -Halo 3 ODST music plays-

Hope you guys like it!

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> Looks great man maybe this could be a side game before h5. Why do i feel the unidentified ship is the Spirit of Fire?
> Looking forward to more i love reading these scripts.

You felt right. lol

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First of all, I loved it, great script.

> If there will be an ODST Ops in halo 5… I have my own script to share, please :slight_smile:
>
> ODST Ops - Episode 1
>
> Location: Crash site at Earth
> Lasky: Lasky to Infinity, something large just crashed in the middle of the dessert. I need some troopers down here to come with me and check this thing out.
>
> <mark>Rather than being pragmatic, use an imperative, Order those troopers! he’s the captain of the infinity for crying out loud: “Send some troops to my location”.</mark>
>
> Infinity: Yes, sir. Dropping some ODST’s to your location.
>
> <mark>Perhaps a bit too specific - “ODSTs inbound”. (Also that use of the apostrophe means possession)</mark>
>
> -ODST’s drop and come out their pods-
>
> * Lasky: So, you’re the troopers. Thanks for coming down here. Couldn’t go to that crash site alone, because uh… you never know if there’s enemies aboard that ship. You guys must be Buck, Dutch, and the Rookie?
>
> ODST’s: Yes, Sir. That’s us. *
>
> <mark>An example of it not flowing, it’s no time for chatting and introducing one another when your in a mission.</mark>
>
> Lasky: Ok, troopers! Let’s get on these mongooses and go check the crash site out.
>
> <mark>Perfect.</mark>
>
> -Lasky and troopers aboard their rides, and head to the crash site-
>
> Dutch: Woah… -Getting closer to the crash site- What is that?
>
> Captain Del Rio: Infinity captain to Lasky, what do you guys got there?
>
> <mark>Bad English - Either: “what’s going on down there?” or " what have you guys got?"</mark>
>
> Lasky: Unidentifyed UNSC starship… We’re going in.
>
> Del Rio: As soon as you guys find out what it is, contact me.
>
> <mark>Disrupts the flow. This needs to either be closer to the beginning of the mission or not at all.</mark>
>
> Lasky: Yes, sir.
>
> Buck: Sir, it looks plasma damaged…
>
> Lasky: Troopers… prepare your weapons. There’s probably covenant here. -Pulls out magnum-
>
> <mark>Magnum seems a bit too… formal? like when you’re on the infinity and it gets boarded. If he is on a mission, it’ll more likely be a shotgun or something.</mark>
>
> Troopers: Yes, sir.
>
> Buck: -Pulls out Battle rifle-
>
> Dutch: -pulls out 2 SMG’s-
>
> Rookie: -pulls out assault rifle-
>
> <mark>No ODST silenced SMG? If you look here, you can see their roles. Dutch is a heavys specialist. The thing is about a squad of such ODSTs, is that they function as a unit fulfilling certain tasks suited to their roles.</mark>
>
> Lasky: Look. There’s a damaged hole we can fit in through. Head in troopers.
>
> <mark>Doesn’t quite flow. “Look, an opening. Move troopers”</mark>
>
> -Troopers and lasky go through hole-
>
> Dutch: Dead grunts and jackals all over the place.
>
> Buck: Looks like they were killed by the crash.
>
> Lasky: Then, that means they were alive just before the crash. Some can be still alive. Be quiet.
>
> Dutch: Where’s the dead humans? Could this ship be abandoned?
>
> <mark>Two following questions sounds like a narrative. “This ship could have been abandoned”. Dutch won’t ask and answer his own question so you have two people’s dialogue here.</mark>
>
> Lasky: Either that, or they’re in their tubes resting.
>
> <mark>Just a little sentence restructuring: “Either that or they’re resting in their tubes”</mark>
>
>
> Rookie: Do you guys hear tha-
>
> Lasky: -Interuppts rookie- Shh! Hide somewhere! A brute squad…
>
> Somewhere sounds like Lasky has no control and he is the leader. “Hide” will be suffice. Also condense the second to “Brute Squad!”
>
> -Troopers and lasky hide in corners-
>
> Brute: No sir! No sign of humans on this ship. But we crashed. -talking to covenant leader (Jul M’dama, or another leader)-
>
> <mark>Brutes are not so articulate, keep the sentences simple here, their not prophets! “No sign sign of human (filth?)”. Not Jul M’Dama, the brutes and elites are not the best of buddies</mark>
>
> Brute 2: Wait a minute. I smell human flesh! Check everywhere!
>
> <mark>Again, condense it: “I smell human flesh!”. “Check everywhere!” would more likely be separate brute dialogue"</mark>
>
> Lasky: Alright troopers. On the count of 3… We fire! 1…2…3! -Whispers-
>
> <mark>Lasky needs to be more subtle here. Have him giving a simple nod to the troopers, slowly grabbing/cocking his weapon. Then count down: “3…2…1”, it’s more precise.</mark>
>
> -ODST’s and Lasky start shooting brute squad-
>
> Brute 2: Humans! I knew it! Kill them! -Brute squad starts firing back-
>
> <mark>Lose the pronouns and condense it. “Humans! Kill them!”.</mark>
>
> Dutch: Eat this, you covenant -Yoinks!-! -Throws grenade-
>
> <mark>Only use if we going to hear the actual words in Game. Again, a bit more reconstruction: “Eat [insert profanity referring to defecation here] covenant [insert profanity here]”.</mark>
>
> Buck: …Are they dead?..
>
> Lasky: Yes, they’re dead.
>
> <mark>A simple “Yes” is suffice.</mark>
>
> Del Rio: Captain to Lasky, what do you guys have there?
>
> <mark>This confuses me, Lasky is captain, we don’t know what’s happened to Del Rio. Also use “what’s going on down there” makes a bit more sense.</mark>
>
> Lasky: Still not Identified. But there are covies here. Troopers… let’s explore more.
>
> <mark>Identified? They’ve identified them as brutes on board a UNSC ship. Change ‘identified’ with say ‘sure/certain’ yet. “Let’s explore more” doesn’t sound too serious. Perhaps the sentence is just too large for dialogue, “let’s explore” will do as it’s not as if they have started exploring much yet is it?</mark>
>
> Buck: I thought the brutes were extinct…?
>
> <mark>Who thought that they were extinct? (Unless it is stated in the books, then just ignore me)</mark>
>
> Lasky: We all thought wrong.
>
> <mark>Good last line, very nice.</mark>
>
>
> End of episode 1. Will post more soon, below.

First off, I’m lovin this story, a great way to reintroduce some old and familiar yet unfamiliar faces.
You’re story is well structured, layered with suspense and a good amount of action in it. A very interesting story.

One criticism you may want to consider, is that the dialogue doesn’t seem to flow/fit. I have highlighted my comments. I hope they are of use.

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> ODST Ops - Episode 2
>
> -Gunfire and brute falls down. ODST’s and Lasky walk in-
>
> Lasky: Look. Three rooms. Look in all of them, troopers.
>
> Buck: -enters room 1- Uh…I got a room full of cryotubes…
>
> Dutch: -Enters room 2- I got the same thing…
>
> Rookie: -enters room 3- Same here…
>
> Lasky: Look who’s inside those tubes. Could be some Spartan 2’s Missing in Action…
>
> Buck: -Reading a cryotube label- Hmm… Captain James Gregory Cutter…Sir, i found the captain of this ship!
>
> Lasky: Activate that cryotube and look in the others! Let me speak with him.
>
> <mark>Not a biggy but replace ‘that’ with ‘the’. “Let me speak with him”? is he asking for permission? “I want to speak with him”, commands more authority. (or something similar)</mark>
>
> Buck: -activates Captain Cutter’s cryotube-
>
> Cutter: -awakes and coughs- Where am i? Who are you? Wait…I’m still on the Spirit of Fire! How did you find us?
>
> <mark>Seems a little too cliche and not very realistic. Perhaps have him rushing out mumbling about the brutes? Three questions seems a bit excessive.</mark>
>
> Lasky: Captain Cutter… Hello. I am Commander Lasky from the UNSC Infinity. Your ship was surely gone for a long time! Your ship crashed onto Earth because it was damaged by covenant. But don’t worry, i’ll find a way to fix it.
>
> No “surely”. Also change the next to “You crashed down to Earth”, “It was damaged by the covenant”. “I’ll”? Is Lasky personally going to fix it? Make it a “We” referring to the Infinity.
>
> Cutter: I’m glad someone found us.
>
> Dutch: Sir, I got some Spartan II’s over here! -Halo music starts playing-
>
> Rookie: So do I.
>
> <mark>“Same Here”</mark>
>
> Lasky: Activate them troopers!
>
> Del Rio: Del Rio to Lasky, what do you got?
>
> <mark>Bad English: “What HAVE you got?”</mark>
>
> Lasky: Sir! You’re gonna love this! We found missing UNSC ship Spirit of Fire! It has Spartan II’s aboard too!
>
> No “too”
>
> Del Rio: Sending several pelicans to pick you guys up! We’re bringing Captain Cutter and those spartans aboard!
>
> <mark>Condense it: “Sending Pelicans to pick you guys up”</mark>.
>
> Lasky: Ok, Sir! Troopers gear up. We’re heading abck to the Infinity!
>
> -Moments later on the Infinity-
>
> Del Rio: Good to see you old friend! -Shakes Cutter’s hand-
>
> Cutter: Good to see you too! Listen uhh…my ship is damaged. Commander lasky here said you guys could do something about it.
>
> <mark>Cutter sounds uncomfotable with the “listen…” sentence. Perhaps just replace the whole line with “You too”.</mark>
>
> Del Rio: Of course! I’ll send some engineers down there.
>
> Cutter: Thank you. I appreciate i-
>
> -marine disturbs in panic-
>
> Marine: Sir! Covenant! On Earth! Again! Rightnow! Do something!
>
> <mark>Did that marine, a nobody, a soldier in the ranks of many just order a UNSC captain of a ship what to do? No way. Also the covenant was disbanded after Halo 3. This is probably a group of brutes as you say.</mark>
>
> Del Rio: Covenant just don’t know when to quit! Sending marines and special teams of ODST’s. Troopers…double time.
>
> Lasky: Troopers. I’ve put you back with your old team back when you were at New Mombasa!
>
> <mark>Lasky remembers the very story of a group of Random ODSTs? This line seems redundant to me.</mark>
>
> -Moments later-
>
> Buck: Good to see you all again! Romeo, Dutch, Mickey, Rookie, Dare, ready to get back to work?
>
> Romeo: Yes, Sir!
>
> <mark>This doesn’t quite flow here</mark>
>
> Mickey: I’m ready to kick some covenant -Yoink!-.
>
> Lasky: Troopers.Get to your pods,ASAP! Oh yeah… if you see some elites down there[… don’t shoot them. The Arbiter’s forces have rejoined us in combat! Good luck down there, and save Hummanity! -Halo 3 ODST music plays-
>
> <mark>The “oh yeah” bit sounds a bit to casual. Perhaps reintroduce the elites when reuniting Cutter with Del Rio.</mark>
>
> Hope you guys like it!

First off, why are they in cryo tubes when enemies are on board? Aren’t they sitting ducks? An explanation for this would be nice.

Again, i’m liking the story. I hope the suggestions can help you again.
Also make sure you don’t get too carried away with the plot as it is not the main campaign. Perhaps the elites are reunited with the UNSC in the main campaign?

Del Rio - not Infinity captain.

If it is the same squad, then don’t reintroduce them to each other, just either have them already together or not. Save introductions and relationships between characters for new characters you want to introduce and develop with them. There needs to be some set friendships which makes the player feel like they can carry on where they left off.

Explain the Spirit of Fire / Brute attack more in detail. Did a ship board them while in cryo, making them crash to Earth… and killing their own troops?

Did they fight some, got to cryo, then crash? Or did a brute battle cruiser crash into the Spirit of Fire, then crash to Earth?

The story is interesting and well structured, just think about these certain areas and keep it up!

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I hope i didn’t put you off writing these, but one more thing that you may want to consider is gameplay. For episode one, we see Lasky about to investigate a ship, then fight some brutes. How will this be split up into chapters?

Perhaps it would be best to write the whole season, then break it down into episodes then chapters, this way, the quality will be consistent.

I’m eager to hear more tho so keep em coming!