New Halo Fanfic, Need Input!

Hey guys! I am currently rebooting my Halo fanfic blog and was hoping for a little outside input. Everyone I know likes the story, but that doesn’t help me improve or grow as a writer so I am looking for some outside critique. All criticisms are welcomed. If you loved it, great! Tell me why. If you hated it, even better! Tell me why. Your help will be invaluable. I eventually hope to gain a following and if I do, I will be sure to credit anyone who helps out. The link will be below.

On a little side note, I am also looking to animate my story, so if anyone would like to help out, or even teach me, I would greatly appreciate it.

Any takers?

booty

Gull wing doors on a warthog. You crazy!

Nice writing, keep it up. :wink:

Nice Writing!