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> I actually had some more thoughts on this. Prepare for a criticism dump, but realize that I still stand by this being a better version than Brian Reed came up with. Jul 'Mdama was basically an atheist who pretened to be religious to gain his followers. Maybe he would ask if the Great Journey was real, but he’d be satisfied with the answer Locke gives. Also, why did Buck have to die? We don’t really gain much out of that, story-wise. It could just as easily be scrapped with no effect on this revised version. Also, some things seemed really off about Locke’s personality, which is my biggest complaint of them all.
> Locke is not the type to be completely stoic about having to hunt down a legend like the Chief. He acts like it, but deep down, he harbors such a great disappointment at the idea of the Chief being a traitor. We see it in the “All Hail” trailer, where he doesn’t sound like he enjoys what he’s doing, but rather feels betrayed by an icon of humanity, and that he has to do this. I think the fight dialogue at the end should reflect that sense of hurt betrayal at the very least. I have some ideas for the dialogue:
> As the Chief enters the bridge
> Locke: So, you’ve come at last. Tell me, what did you hope to accomplish, unleashing the Guardians? What did you want from all the horror you’ve caused with that damn Forerunner? What was the point?!
> Chief: I was trying to save us all, you have no id. ea of the threat we faced.
> Locke: The pain in Locke’s voice is obvious That’s all you have to say for yourself? For these horrible atrocities you’ve caused? They were right…I have to end this, for the good of humanity.
> Gameplay begins, Locke charges and Chief dodges, beginning a fistfight
> Locke: You were supposed to be our savior. You were our hero, the one everyone looked up to! You were a legend! Humanity trusted you! pause I trusted you!
> Chief: There was a lot more at stake than you think. I didn’t do this on purpose.
> Locke: Then what was it? You’re going to tell me some mysterious entity forced your hand?
> Chief: Yes, in fact. This was al planned out by the Didact, every last bit of it. He brought me there to start the Reclamation, which brought about this destruction.
> Locke: And let me guess, you had to go AWOL to save us again? You think I can believe all this?
> Chief: Would you believe me if I told you we did all that because the Didact was going to put a massive fleet under his control? Would you believe me if I told you the Covenant would be nothing compared to that? Would you then understand why I had to do this without the UNSC?
> Locke: I…I…Locke backs down I’m sorry I doubted you, sir. Had I known…
> Chief: You wouldn’t have stopped me. I can tell.
> Tanaka (over comm): We found Blue Team, orders?
> Locke: Let them go, we were wrong. They aren’t traitors. It’s time to bring them home.
>
> Just a thought.
Thanks for putting the time to make such helpful criticism. I suppose I misunderstood Locke’s character. I always saw him as an ONI man, able to put on a nice guy attitude but ultimately dedicated to the shadiest branch of the UNSC. Your model of him makes a lot more sense. Bucky dying was probably a brash decision I my part. I just loved Jul M’dama as character in the novels and felt that he needed a fittingly dramatic death. I understand he wasn’t the greatest fighter, but saw him as one of the cleverest Elites, a trait that really added some neat dimensions to his character for me. I would definitely be open to changing that scene to something that left Bucky alive, I’m just not sure what. Right now I’m thinking maybe Jul proves clever enough to evade the Spartans and get into his Phantom, only to die when the Arbiter’s forces shoot down. In a way, his own cleverness would prove the death of him.
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> As someone recently pointed out, the didactic died after Halo 4, it seems like a good direction, just make sure it fits with the canon. Especially stuff that was revealed somewhat recently. Chief has also been with blue team since Halo 1 ended. They go back to reach to rescue survivors, and Linda was actually on the Autumn when it jumped into Reach, she was in cryo and they launched her pod into space, and Chief and Johnson picked her up.
As I recall though wasn’t Blue Squad ultimately swept into secrecy by ONI? is it plausible to think that Master Chief assumed Blue Squad died during the events of Halo 2/3?
And damn, they are really ignoring the whole Master Chief is the last Spartan left thing from Halo 1.
I will definitely do a round of edits keeping the true nature of Locke’s character in mind. Hopefully I can get it done this weekend if homework isn’t too bad.