Hey Everyone,
This is my first post here. I wanted to share a comic series I’ve been working on. I do plan on continuing this story, so I was hoping to get some feedback and constructive criticism so that I can incorporate it into my next series.
Hope you enjoy. 
Thanks,
ShowTom
Haha those are pretty good, nice work dude. Had me giggling at the fight scene in the 1st one - “Shluk” lol. Photography works pretty well, maybe for the next ones you could feature some lighting effects - like day/night something similar? Good stuff
Puts on overly-harsh critique hat
> I may look like a four, but you and I both know showTom is a three
So why’s he saying it then? Pretty forceful exposition here. If showtom’s the guy speaking, why does he refer to himself in third person? Also, missing apostrophe on “'em”.
Why did the Elite scout go back to the base and tell Soro in person? Couldn’t he just radio them? And why did Soro kill him, considering Elites spy basically all the time? Seems like they’d never win any conflict ever with stupid rules like these.
When the Elite strike team surrounds Freedom, why do they just sit there and allow them to have a talk before just shooting them? Also, calling -Yoink- on using a friggin’ katana ih that time of technological advancement. Why do all the others just stand around and not help Takao or the Elite at all? Seems like a projectile weapon could have ended this fight in seconds. It kinda seems fragmented the way everyone calmly announces they’ve killed someone because the concept of actually fighting as a team instead of just blindly rushing the enemy. How would anyone be able to fire two guns at once without missing horribly?
Wait, the Jackals were right next to them for the whole fight, and somehow neither of them noticed each other?
“Kig-Yar, fire away!”
This makes about as much sense as anyone saying “Humans, fire away.”
Also, those Jackals have the aim of bloody stormtroopers, they can’t hit anything.
Janna is clearly shooting Takao in the back in frame 21 in part three.
“He wasn’t boosting at us, he’s boosting straight for the pelican”
Should be isn’t, not wasn’t. How does he even have time to say this? How slow are these ghosts? Why’d he take his helmet off?
Overall thoughts is a 6/10, which is still pretty good and an above average score. It’s alright, and has some pretty nice action scenes, but my biggest problem is how the characters have a good paragraph of speech while clearly surrounded by enemies, without even any cover. They just have a nice chat about the plan, with no urgency about being out in the open with no cover.