So I’ll start by saying that the Halo 5 story is almost universally disliked due to the lack of depth in any character, the lame dialogue, bad friendly Ai and a terrible cliffhanger ending but I was wondering if anyone has ever thought to do a fan rewrite of the story that keeps the main plot points of the game such as Jul’s death, Blue teams search for Cortana/Osiris’s hunt for Blue team and Cortana awakening the guardians but fills in the gaps of these moments with actual character development and maybe even certain scenarios playing out differently (such as the fight between Chief and Locke).
I’m not saying Brian Reed cannot write good stories by the but he didn’t seem to write a very good one with Halo 5.
So if anyone is any good at writing and wants to take on a task such as this then be my guest, I’m certain I wont be the only one who would be interested in reading it.
Bungie did it best.
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> Bungie did it best.
Hello, I’m Halo:Reach, and this is -Yoink!-!
There were most likely a different story (as revealed by recent leaks), which Microsoft scrapped because of peoples dislikes forwards the villain in Halo 4. That is why the basically killed of The Didact in the comics, introduced warden forever in the comics and also had Jul 'Mdama killed of at the first mission of Halo 5.
The original story (if we take the recent leaks seriously, which I do) was about Halsey being at least a partial villain.
Also regarding the current writing and level design of the campaign are just dreadful, there is literally no apparent reason to replay the campaign, which is so sad (maybe to find skulls). I personally spent literally hours on each mission on Halo 3 but that is not the case with Halo 5.
However with the next update (firefight one) they are including score attack in the campaign (why I don’t understand) but also something they only teased, which could be anything really, but most likely it will be some more collectables or something but who knows (except for 343i)
We’re are these leaks about Microsoft hating didact?! For study purpose.
Its truely a shame if he’s gone. They invested 3 marvelous books about him and they kill him off cause of his dislike in halo 4!
I actually did this a while back, I think around January, I decided that I hated Brian Reed and I hated his writing, so I re-wrote the Halo 5 story and made it actually make sense.
I’d have to go find the file but it essentially focused more around Blue Team investigating the Guardian activities, with Osiris hunting them and encountering each other at a few parts of the game, until Blue Team are dragged to Genesis at one of the later guardians (meaning they aren’t pointlessly pondering around Genesis for the whole game). I changed the beginning so that Jul escaped Orisis by Phantom, later to show up in Sunaion trying to take control of the Guardian, so the whole battle for Sunaion more focused on the UNSC and Arbiter’s forces trying to take the Guardian first, that way it wouldn’t feel like the whole civil war was just side shafted in favor of the Genesis plot.
I think I also toyed with the idea of Cortana having no control over the Warden, and that he was more controlling her than she was him, that way it added a touch of intrigue to his character and made him a more formidable villain.
Obviously there’s a lot to tweak when it comes to Halo 5’s story, since it was absolute garbage that not only didn’t make a ton of sense directional wise, but completely undermined every side story they’ve done since 2012. It’s an absolute wonder how they got away with pushing that story.
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> I actually did this a while back, I think around January, I decided that I hated Brian Reed and I hated his writing, so I re-wrote the Halo 5 story and made it actually make sense.
> I’d have to go find the file but it essentially focused more around Blue Team investigating the Guardian activities, with Osiris hunting them and encountering each other at a few parts of the game, until Blue Team are dragged to Genesis at one of the later guardians (meaning they aren’t pointlessly pondering around Genesis for the whole game). I changed the beginning so that Jul escaped Orisis by Phantom, later to show up in Sunaion trying to take control of the Guardian, so the whole battle for Sunaion more focused on the UNSC and Arbiter’s forces trying to take the Guardian first, that way it wouldn’t feel like the whole civil war was just side shafted in favor of the Genesis plot.
> I think I also toyed with the idea of Cortana having no control over the Warden, and that he was more controlling her than she was him, that way it added a touch of intrigue to his character and made him a more formidable villain.
> Obviously there’s a lot to tweak when it comes to Halo 5’s story, since it was absolute garbage that not only didn’t make a ton of sense directional wise, but completely undermined every side story they’ve done since 2012. It’s an absolute wonder how they got away with pushing that story.
I’d actually really like to see your version and so would other people I imagine, you should post it somewhere
All right the basic premise of this post is to describe a slightly better variant of the Halo 5 story. I will be attempting to do so with as little new content as possible, though obviously some is inevitable and necessary in order to reshape the narrative. It’s also worth noting that I am attempting to do this with certain things set-up in H4, Spartan Ops, and the trailers for the game in mind as such Locke and the Rogue Chief story are here to stay. I would likely have chosen a different path if those things weren’t set up in advance. I’ll be ignoring escalation, because I have up in the second story arc.
Opening Cut Scene: We open with a new cut scene in which Lasky (or Hood or anyone) is briefing Locke on the mission. The master chief has been ‘missing’ for the past six months. During that time he and the rest of blue team have been ‘spotted’ on five worlds. Within 24 hours of each sighting. The entire population of those worlds was decimated. Lasky makes it very clear (as in the trailer) that they have publicly announced the Chief and the other members of Blue team are dead and that Locke’s mission is to make that come to pass. He protests, he became a Spartan to get away from his past, but ultimately due to his sense of duty and desire to save lives he agrees to follow the order. There is breaking news the Chief has been spotted on Meridian. There is no mention of Cortana or Halsey at this point. Neither Oni/Nor the UNSC have knowledge of the role they play in this.
Mission 1: The meridian missions would follow. They would be largely unchanged. Exceptions would be the elevator ride at the beginning would allow Locke to remind Tanaka that he chose her to be on the team because of her experience with the outer worlds and a glassed planet. This would give her the opportunity for some characterization that didn’t require you to stand around for twenty minutes on a level.
<strong>Mission 2:</strong> The cave section of meridian
The frankly silly ‘Fight scene’ with the chief would be replaced with a firefight. Locke’s team would fair okay in this, but ultimately be outclassed. Some of the dialogue would change obviously. Locke would order Blue team to stand down and warn him that failure to do so would confirm that he was branded a traitor. The chief would then tell them what was going on.
Mission 3: Insert ‘Blue team’ here. Notable changes would be that Cortana states she is being held captive and then begins listing planets. Far more than just meridian. She is literally listing everywhere there is a guardian.
Mission 4: Back to Meridian, The chief would depart via teleporter. The meridian missions would continue as they did. The Warden would appear far more sinister than he does in the game and repeatedly claim that they wouldn’t let them free ‘her’
Cut Scene Blue team hitching a ride on the Guardian and Locke managing to save some of the populous of Meridian. He would the report in with the next planet’s name, Sanghelios. Halsey has reported in. Osiris would then go to Sanghelios. The team have four goals: Find the arbiter, Find Halsey, Stop the Guardian, And kill Jul 'Mdama.
Missions 5-7
The Sanghelios missions would continue largely as they did with the first mission of the game following the finding of the arbiter. That mission would obviously need expanding. Arby would get the kill shot on Jul ‘Mdama. The next cut scene would follow with Halsey telling what she knows. She would give a detailed description of what the guardians were and what they were capable of and she would simply say that there resurgence was her fault.
Mission 8 The next blue team mission would be here. Change in the dialogue would largely revolve around Cortana urging the team to ‘free her’ and warning about the warden. And the rest of Blue team acting concerned about the chief. This would allow the team to show their bonds of friendship and allow for some character development for the chief. Possibly, a speech in which in he explains why his friendship with Cortana is so important to him. The mission would end with Cortana being ‘freed.’
Cut Scene We would immediately cut back to Locke and Halsey. Halsey would be screaming, “You have to stop him, he doesn’t know what he’s doing. He can’t free her.” She would then continue explaining that Cortana has gone rampant and she has been freeing the guardians.
Mission 9-10: The rest of the sanghelios missions would continue as they did in the game. Osiris hitch a ride on the guardian.
Mission 11 The next blue team mission would happen. It would be the same as in the game save no warden battles and the Chief is unaware (though may be starting to expect) that something is wrong with Cortana as she ushers them to the place they can destroy the guardians (Actually the cryptum).
<strong>Mission 12</strong> Locke’s missions would continue unchanged, until blue team is freed.
<strong>Mission 13</strong>
The final mission would be blue team taking on a guardian that was sent to re-capture them. It would play out like a scarab battle of sorts with there being a playground of vehicles and weapons to use in order to slowly disable it allowing the team to break into it and destroy the computer core/power source. The AI would reveal that the warden had been designed as a ‘guard’ against those who would reawaken the guardians. Ending cut scene would state that there was a device that forerunners had used to shut the guardians down when they had been misused before. Now they only need a map.
P____ost credits scene. A funky looking brute is scene carrying a familiar hammer. There is a jackal behind him that has Halsey’s missing arm grafted to it.
Legendary ending: What remains of the ark or another ring. A single flood spore form is scene scuttling from some debris and a familiar booming voice echoes, “Your sins remain unburied.”
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> All right the basic premise of this post is to describe a slightly better variant of the Halo 5 story. I will be attempting to do so with as little new content as possible, though obviously some is inevitable and necessary in order to reshape the narrative. It’s also worth noting that I am attempting to do this with certain things set-up in H4, Spartan Ops, and the trailers for the game in mind as such Locke and the Rogue Chief story are here to stay. I would likely have chosen a different path if those things weren’t set up in advance. I’ll be ignoring escalation, because I have up in the second story arc.
>
> Opening Cut Scene: We open with a new cut scene in which Lasky (or Hood or anyone) is briefing Locke on the mission. The master chief has been ‘missing’ for the past six months. During that time he and the rest of blue team have been ‘spotted’ on five worlds. Within 24 hours of each sighting. The entire population of those worlds was decimated. Lasky makes it very clear (as in the trailer) that they have publicly announced the Chief and the other members of Blue team are dead and that Locke’s mission is to make that come to pass. He protests, he became a Spartan to get away from his past, but ultimately due to his sense of duty and desire to save lives he agrees to follow the order. There is breaking news the Chief has been spotted on Meridian. There is no mention of Cortana or Halsey at this point. Neither Oni/Nor the UNSC have knowledge of the role they play in this.
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> Mission 1: The meridian missions would follow. They would be largely unchanged. Exceptions would be the elevator ride at the beginning would allow Locke to remind Tanaka that he chose her to be on the team because of her experience with the outer worlds and a glassed planet. This would give her the opportunity for some characterization that didn’t require you to stand around for twenty minutes on a level.
>
> <strong>Mission 2:</strong> The cave section of meridian
> The frankly silly ‘Fight scene’ with the chief would be replaced with a firefight. Locke’s team would fair okay in this, but ultimately be outclassed. Some of the dialogue would change obviously. Locke would order Blue team to stand down and warn him that failure to do so would confirm that he was branded a traitor. The chief would then tell them what was going on.
>
> Mission 3: Insert ‘Blue team’ here. Notable changes would be that Cortana states she is being held captive and then begins listing planets. Far more than just meridian. She is literally listing everywhere there is a guardian.
>
> Mission 4: Back to Meridian, The chief would depart via teleporter. The meridian missions would continue as they did. The Warden would appear far more sinister than he does in the game and repeatedly claim that they wouldn’t let them free ‘her’
> Cut Scene Blue team hitching a ride on the Guardian and Locke managing to save some of the populous of Meridian. He would the report in with the next planet’s name, Sanghelios. Halsey has reported in. Osiris would then go to Sanghelios. The team have four goals: Find the arbiter, Find Halsey, Stop the Guardian, And kill Jul 'Mdama.
>
> Missions 5-7
> The Sanghelios missions would continue largely as they did with the first mission of the game following the finding of the arbiter. That mission would obviously need expanding. Arby would get the kill shot on Jul ‘Mdama. The next cut scene would follow with Halsey telling what she knows. She would give a detailed description of what the guardians were and what they were capable of and she would simply say that there resurgence was her fault.
>
> Mission 8 The next blue team mission would be here. Change in the dialogue would largely revolve around Cortana urging the team to ‘free her’ and warning about the warden. And the rest of Blue team acting concerned about the chief. This would allow the team to show their bonds of friendship and allow for some character development for the chief. Possibly, a speech in which in he explains why his friendship with Cortana is so important to him. The mission would end with Cortana being ‘freed.’
> Cut Scene We would immediately cut back to Locke and Halsey. Halsey would be screaming, “You have to stop him, he doesn’t know what he’s doing. He can’t free her.” She would then continue explaining that Cortana has gone rampant and she has been freeing the guardians.
>
> Mission 9-10: The rest of the sanghelios missions would continue as they did in the game. Osiris hitch a ride on the guardian.
>
> Mission 11 The next blue team mission would happen. It would be the same as in the game save no warden battles and the Chief is unaware (though may be starting to expect) that something is wrong with Cortana as she ushers them to the place they can destroy the guardians (Actually the cryptum).
>
> <strong>Mission 12</strong> Locke’s missions would continue unchanged, until blue team is freed.
>
> <strong>Mission 13</strong>
> The final mission would be blue team taking on a guardian that was sent to re-capture them. It would play out like a scarab battle of sorts with there being a playground of vehicles and weapons to use in order to slowly disable it allowing the team to break into it and destroy the computer core/power source. The AI would reveal that the warden had been designed as a ‘guard’ against those who would reawaken the guardians. Ending cut scene would state that there was a device that forerunners had used to shut the guardians down when they had been misused before. Now they only need a map.
>
> P____ost credits scene. A funky looking brute is scene carrying a familiar hammer. There is a jackal behind him that has Halsey’s missing arm grafted to it.
>
> Legendary ending: What remains of the ark or another ring. A single flood spore form is scene scuttling from some debris and a familiar booming voice echoes, “Your sins remain unburied.”
This sounds awesome, I would have as where you go up to meet arbiter a cutscene starts where you see him fighting off those 2 elite assassins and a phantom swoops past and drops off Jul who then duels with the arbiter who dispatches him with practised ease before greeting the spartans
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> This sounds awesome, I would have as where you go up to meet arbiter a cutscene starts where you see him fighting off those 2 elite assassins and a phantom swoops past and drops off Jul who then duels with the arbiter who dispatches him with practised ease before greeting the Spartans
I appreciate the sentiment. Anything would be better than the first cut scene death from the actual game.
The story should have be locke and chief actually trying to kill each other, like the trailers depicted and hyped. Perhaps Oni in all their secretiveness found out cortana was a baddie and was afraid the chief would side with her, so due to his extreme power level (over 9000), he had to be eliminated quietly. This in turn would fuel chief’s desire to face the corruption of oni, and eventually turn locke to his cause after a lengthy cat and mouse campaign of close calls (that you actually play) and forged mutual respect. Well anyways, that what I think should have happened. Instead we got a “chief is off doing something, go fetch him. You can totally have a fist fight if one of you says come at me bro”.
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> > All right the basic premise of this post is to describe a slightly better variant of the Halo 5 story. I will be attempting to do so with as little new content as possible, though obviously some is inevitable and necessary in order to reshape the narrative. It’s also worth noting that I am attempting to do this with certain things set-up in H4, Spartan Ops, and the trailers for the game in mind as such Locke and the Rogue Chief story are here to stay. I would likely have chosen a different path if those things weren’t set up in advance. I’ll be ignoring escalation, because I have up in the second story arc.
> >
> > Opening Cut Scene: We open with a new cut scene in which Lasky (or Hood or anyone) is briefing Locke on the mission. The master chief has been ‘missing’ for the past six months. During that time he and the rest of blue team have been ‘spotted’ on five worlds. Within 24 hours of each sighting. The entire population of those worlds was decimated. Lasky makes it very clear (as in the trailer) that they have publicly announced the Chief and the other members of Blue team are dead and that Locke’s mission is to make that come to pass. He protests, he became a Spartan to get away from his past, but ultimately due to his sense of duty and desire to save lives he agrees to follow the order. There is breaking news the Chief has been spotted on Meridian. There is no mention of Cortana or Halsey at this point. Neither Oni/Nor the UNSC have knowledge of the role they play in this.
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> > Mission 1: The meridian missions would follow. They would be largely unchanged. Exceptions would be the elevator ride at the beginning would allow Locke to remind Tanaka that he chose her to be on the team because of her experience with the outer worlds and a glassed planet. This would give her the opportunity for some characterization that didn’t require you to stand around for twenty minutes on a level.
> >
> > <strong>Mission 2:</strong> The cave section of meridian
> > The frankly silly ‘Fight scene’ with the chief would be replaced with a firefight. Locke’s team would fair okay in this, but ultimately be outclassed. Some of the dialogue would change obviously. Locke would order Blue team to stand down and warn him that failure to do so would confirm that he was branded a traitor. The chief would then tell them what was going on.
> >
> > Mission 3: Insert ‘Blue team’ here. Notable changes would be that Cortana states she is being held captive and then begins listing planets. Far more than just meridian. She is literally listing everywhere there is a guardian.
> >
> > Mission 4: Back to Meridian, The chief would depart via teleporter. The meridian missions would continue as they did. The Warden would appear far more sinister than he does in the game and repeatedly claim that they wouldn’t let them free ‘her’
> > Cut Scene Blue team hitching a ride on the Guardian and Locke managing to save some of the populous of Meridian. He would the report in with the next planet’s name, Sanghelios. Halsey has reported in. Osiris would then go to Sanghelios. The team have four goals: Find the arbiter, Find Halsey, Stop the Guardian, And kill Jul 'Mdama.
> >
> > Missions 5-7
> > The Sanghelios missions would continue largely as they did with the first mission of the game following the finding of the arbiter. That mission would obviously need expanding. Arby would get the kill shot on Jul ‘Mdama. The next cut scene would follow with Halsey telling what she knows. She would give a detailed description of what the guardians were and what they were capable of and she would simply say that there resurgence was her fault.
> >
> > Mission 8 The next blue team mission would be here. Change in the dialogue would largely revolve around Cortana urging the team to ‘free her’ and warning about the warden. And the rest of Blue team acting concerned about the chief. This would allow the team to show their bonds of friendship and allow for some character development for the chief. Possibly, a speech in which in he explains why his friendship with Cortana is so important to him. The mission would end with Cortana being ‘freed.’
> > Cut Scene We would immediately cut back to Locke and Halsey. Halsey would be screaming, “You have to stop him, he doesn’t know what he’s doing. He can’t free her.” She would then continue explaining that Cortana has gone rampant and she has been freeing the guardians.
> >
> > Mission 9-10: The rest of the sanghelios missions would continue as they did in the game. Osiris hitch a ride on the guardian.
> >
> > Mission 11 The next blue team mission would happen. It would be the same as in the game save no warden battles and the Chief is unaware (though may be starting to expect) that something is wrong with Cortana as she ushers them to the place they can destroy the guardians (Actually the cryptum).
> >
> > <strong>Mission 12</strong> Locke’s missions would continue unchanged, until blue team is freed.
> >
> > <strong>Mission 13</strong>
> > The final mission would be blue team taking on a guardian that was sent to re-capture them. It would play out like a scarab battle of sorts with there being a playground of vehicles and weapons to use in order to slowly disable it allowing the team to break into it and destroy the computer core/power source. The AI would reveal that the warden had been designed as a ‘guard’ against those who would reawaken the guardians. Ending cut scene would state that there was a device that forerunners had used to shut the guardians down when they had been misused before. Now they only need a map.
> >
> > P____ost credits scene. A funky looking brute is scene carrying a familiar hammer. There is a jackal behind him that has Halsey’s missing arm grafted to it.
> >
> > Legendary ending: What remains of the ark or another ring. A single flood spore form is scene scuttling from some debris and a familiar booming voice echoes, “Your sins remain unburied.”
Dude I really like the legendary ending you have there, if that were to happen it would have a big FAT label saying “HALO” written all over it !
Damn they should have hired you !