Hey community. Just yesterday I completed the second episode of my series The Legacy of Echo. I am not very well known and I greatly appreciate every view, comment, or subscription I get. If your interested have a gander at the link below. Enjoy!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hDG7wsPFpGs&list=UUsS0in1ia1DJ11YtGVGg7Sg&index=0&feature=plcp
Hey there!
I saw that you said that you weren’t very popular at the moment on YouTube and thought I’d have a look and comment at certain points which I think are really nice and some parts which could do with improvement. Hopefully this will make you appeal to a larger audience and make you seem more professional!
(The Legacy of Echo Ch.1 A New Story)
Firstly, I like the effects that you put in the beginning, the whole eyes shutting and opening effect was very nice. I would like to say though, when it comes to audio and a few visual changes I would suggest making the transitions a little more smoother. They seem a little sudden if you know what I mean, and as a viewer it makes me feel like you rushed perhaps.
From 2:07 onwards, when you are showing introductory credits, I would definitely consider making them look more professional by making the text more centre screen, a more eye catching font and maybe spice it up with some new colours, outlines and shadings.
The text that is used to state the date and time should be smaller, more discreet and more so in the corner of the screen. Make it more like original computer text too so it adds more effect.
At the part where you take us to the Spartan training facility, I really like the sound effect you added on the hail device and also the way you made it so the screen showed the other Spartans face.
Nice use of the frigate in campaign mode.
I think that the background music should be turned down just a wee bit because I found it hard at times to hear what the characters were saying.
Right… Just got to the end of it and I’d say its a nice 7/10.
That is good by the way lol
Basically have good read of what I wrote above and I hope that it helps you make your third episode even better!
I have subscribed to you, liked your first and second episodes of this series and look forward to seeing more videos from you.
If you want to have a look at my YouTube channel, search: kylehobley
It’s a basic channel at the moment and is neutral in the sense of what I plan to upload to it hence why it is named after me and not called something like ‘gamerkyle’.
I would one day like to look at doing a decent machinima of my own and you sir have given me the inspiration to start planning out a script and story line. Thank you.
Well done to yourself and the team of people who are still helping you I am sure, make your series come to be a success.
Yours sincerely,
Kyle Hobley.
(XBL Gamer Tag - Mp K Silhouette)
> Hey there!
> I saw that you said that you weren’t very popular at the moment on YouTube and thought I’d have a look and comment at certain points which I think are really nice and some parts which could do with improvement. Hopefully this will make you appeal to a larger audience and make you seem more professional!
>
> (The Legacy of Echo Ch.1 A New Story)
>
> Firstly, I like the effects that you put in the beginning, the whole eyes shutting and opening effect was very nice. I would like to say though, when it comes to audio and a few visual changes I would suggest making the transitions a little more smoother. They seem a little sudden if you know what I mean, and as a viewer it makes me feel like you rushed perhaps.
>
> From 2:07 onwards, when you are showing introductory credits, I would definitely consider making them look more professional by making the text more centre screen, a more eye catching font and maybe spice it up with some new colours, outlines and shadings.
> The text that is used to state the date and time should be smaller, more discreet and more so in the corner of the screen. Make it more like original computer text too so it adds more effect.
>
> At the part where you take us to the Spartan training facility, I really like the sound effect you added on the hail device and also the way you made it so the screen showed the other Spartans face.
>
> Nice use of the frigate in campaign mode.
>
> I think that the background music should be turned down just a wee bit because I found it hard at times to hear what the characters were saying.
>
> Right… Just got to the end of it and I’d say its a nice 7/10.
> That is good by the way lol
> Basically have good read of what I wrote above and I hope that it helps you make your third episode even better!
> I have subscribed to you, liked your first and second episodes of this series and look forward to seeing more videos from you.
>
> If you want to have a look at my YouTube channel, search: kylehobley
> It’s a basic channel at the moment and is neutral in the sense of what I plan to upload to it hence why it is named after me and not called something like ‘gamerkyle’.
>
> I would one day like to look at doing a decent machinima of my own and you sir have given me the inspiration to start planning out a script and story line. Thank you.
>
> Well done to yourself and the team of people who are still helping you I am sure, make your series come to be a success.
>
> Yours sincerely,
> Kyle Hobley.
> (XBL Gamer Tag - Mp K Silhouette)
Thank you very much for the advice. These are some things that I have looked at numerous times before buts its always good to get more feedback. Would you believe it if I told you that Ch.1 is only the third video I’ve ever made?
I’m really glad to see people like you who are discovering my content and who want to help it expand. Glad you enjoyed it!
-solar
Be sure to comment either here or on the video itself if you liked it!
Great job man! Nice camera work 
> Great job man! Nice camera work
Now this is rare! This means a lot coming from you! I’m really glad you enjoyed it!
(To avoid any confusion this is my main account, Klutzycoder is my secondary)
The episode is getting nothing but good reviews! If you liked it share it with your friends! I appreciate every view, like, and subscription! It just inspires me to keep going!
> Hey there!
> I saw that you said that you weren’t very popular at the moment on YouTube and thought I’d have a look and comment at certain points which I think are really nice and some parts which could do with improvement. Hopefully this will make you appeal to a larger audience and make you seem more professional!
>
> (The Legacy of Echo Ch.1 A New Story)
>
> Firstly, I like the effects that you put in the beginning, the whole eyes shutting and opening effect was very nice. I would like to say though, when it comes to audio and a few visual changes I would suggest making the transitions a little more smoother. They seem a little sudden if you know what I mean, and as a viewer it makes me feel like you rushed perhaps.
>
> From 2:07 onwards, when you are showing introductory credits, I would definitely consider making them look more professional by making the text more centre screen, a more eye catching font and maybe spice it up with some new colours, outlines and shadings.
> The text that is used to state the date and time should be smaller, more discreet and more so in the corner of the screen. Make it more like original computer text too so it adds more effect.
>
> At the part where you take us to the Spartan training facility, I really like the sound effect you added on the hail device and also the way you made it so the screen showed the other Spartans face.
>
> Nice use of the frigate in campaign mode.
>
> I think that the background music should be turned down just a wee bit because I found it hard at times to hear what the characters were saying.
>
> Right… Just got to the end of it and I’d say its a nice 7/10.
> That is good by the way lol
> Basically have good read of what I wrote above and I hope that it helps you make your third episode even better!
> I have subscribed to you, liked your first and second episodes of this series and look forward to seeing more videos from you.
>
> If you want to have a look at my YouTube channel, search: kylehobley
> It’s a basic channel at the moment and is neutral in the sense of what I plan to upload to it hence why it is named after me and not called something like ‘gamerkyle’.
>
> <mark>I would one day like to look at doing a decent machinima of my own and you sir have given me the inspiration to start planning out a script and story line. Thank you.</mark>
> <mark>Well done to yourself and the team of people who are still helping you I am sure, make your series come to be a success.</mark>
>
> Yours sincerely,
> Kyle Hobley.
> (XBL Gamer Tag - Mp K Silhouette)
I just came back to give this post another view and I just realized a few points you made which I highlighted. I half to say this here and now, you are the first person to seem truly inspired by my work! I’d like to say good luck in your endeavors as well!
These are excellent. The cinematography and action are very well-executed, and the voice acting is decent as well.
The only main issues I spotted that could be changed are the basic fonts, the music being a bit too loud, and the constant cutting to black. You don’t need to do that, just change to the next scene by just fading or instantly switching. Cutting to black is a little jarring, but still a minor issue. The music should carry over a little between scenes too. Also the mining facility scenes in episode 2 seem rushed; the earlier action was great so hopefully that’s just an aberration.
But otherwise it’s really good. The effort and planning that went into the episodes is prevalent, and as a nerd I appreciate your attention to detail with regards to clarifying exactly where and when you are in the Halo Universe. Fixing a few easily fixable issues, and your really good series could quickly become great. Looking forward to more episodes. I give these around a 7.5 or 8 out of 10.
x Master Rob x
> These are excellent. The cinematography and action are very well-executed, and the voice acting is decent as well.
>
> The only main issues I spotted that could be changed are the basic fonts, the music being a bit too loud, and the constant cutting to black. You don’t need to do that, just change to the next scene by just fading or instantly switching. Cutting to black is a little jarring, but still a minor issue. The music should carry over a little between scenes too. Also the mining facility scenes in episode 2 seem rushed; the earlier action was great so hopefully that’s just an aberration.
>
> But otherwise it’s really good. The effort and planning that went into the episodes is prevalent, and as a nerd I appreciate your attention to detail with regards to clarifying exactly where and when you are in the Halo Universe. Fixing a few easily fixable issues, and your really good series could quickly become great. Looking forward to more episodes. I give these around a 7.5 or 8 out of 10.
>
> x Master Rob x
Thank you very much! I’ll be doing my best to fix all these minor issues for future episodes! Glad you liked it.